英文：改语法!和改句子结构求高人帮我改改语法吧.我这文章写得幼稚,顺便帮我改改有些句子的结构.最好写的和美国人一样,加点修饰词之类的~All three of these pieces are a portrait and there are deep m

英文：改语法!和改句子结构求高人帮我改改语法吧.我这文章写得幼稚,顺便帮我改改有些句子的结构.最好写的和美国人一样,加点修饰词之类的~All three of these pieces are a portrait and there are deep m
英文：改语法!和改句子结构
求高人帮我改改语法吧.我这文章写得幼稚,顺便帮我改改有些句子的结构.最好写的和美国人一样,加点修饰词之类的~
All three of these pieces are a portrait and there are deep meaning behind them.Andy Warhol helps Pop Art paintings and screen printings movement in the 20th century.Warhol’s Blonde makes me remember the characters in Avatar because of the blue skin.I think Avatar shows the changing from 20th century till now.In this picture,the woman looks plastic,and Warhol really likes plastic because he thinks plastic people are more beautiful than real people.According to the research he said he thinks people forgot what emotions were supposed to be during the 1960s.That is the reason he likes to focus on famous people’s faces and catch the emotion.My first thought on The Blonde is she looks happy.And then I focus on her face for 5 seconds,I think she looks a little bit upset.At the beginning I think she looks happy because the color is bright.Thus,the color of the picture can change the emotion.The Self-portrait is also from 20th century.Compared to Warhol’s Blond,the Self-portrait looks sad.From her picture we can see she really wants to stop wars because of her experience.She just can use his drawing to show her thinking and sadness.She doesn’t want to speak to others that she hates war,but she just hope his drawing can tell and resonate.The picture of Gudea statue is really different from other two pictures.Gudea was the ruler of the Sumerian city state of Lagash.This statue includes ruler ship and religion.And it reminds me the Chinese Buddha.The same idea is they have their own beliefs.The color of the Gudea statues are always dark because the dark color looks serious.Thus,people would respect it.

英文：改语法!和改句子结构求高人帮我改改语法吧.我这文章写得幼稚,顺便帮我改改有些句子的结构.最好写的和美国人一样,加点修饰词之类的~All three of these pieces are a portrait and there are deep m
你的文章大体意思表达的挺明确的,但是有的地方废话多,有的地方表达不简练 不清晰,记住读起来朗朗上口的文章就是好文章,你的对艺术作品的评价总的来说不错了,我就给改了几个小地方,希望你以后继续努力,再艺术鉴赏方面有所成就
All three of these pieces form a main portrait with a deep meaning behind .Andy Warhol helps Pop Art paintings and screen printings movement in 20th century.Warhol’s Blonde makes me remember the blue- skined characters in Avatar which shows the changes from 20th century to now.In this picture,the woman looks plastic,and Warhol really likes plastic because he thinks plastic people are more beautiful than the real.According to the research,he said,people forgot what emotions were supposed to be during the 1960s,which catalyses him focus on faces of famous people and catch their emotions.the first impression of mine on The Blonde is the happiness and then ,in around 5 seconds,upset.The first happy impression of mine ,I think,is due to the bright color.Thus ,in conclusion,the color of pictures can change the emotion.
Compared to Warhol’s Blond ,The Self-portrait is also from 20th century but focus on the sadness.In her picture we can see she really wants to stop the war.but what she can do is just drawing out the sadness.She doesn’t want to tell others that she hates the war,but she just hope her drawings can tell and resonate.The picture ,Gudea statue,is really different from the other two.Gudea was the ruler of the Sumerian city state of Lagash with ruler ship and religion inside.And it reminds me the Chinese Buddha for they all have their own beliefs.The color of the Gudea statues are always dark because the darkness confuses seriousness ,sadness and the respects of people inside.

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I think this essay is supposed to be in past tense. second of all, i corrected some of the grammatical errors. so far, the essay is fairly typed according to your age and wh...

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US high school style.
I think this essay is supposed to be in past tense. second of all, i corrected some of the grammatical errors. so far, the essay is fairly typed according to your age and where you attend school. ( this is an A work if you go to school in china).
there are a few things you need to keep in mind, at all time.
develop a strong beginning and ending. The beginning is usually a hook, which attracts the readers. The ending should be wise and much more like a conclusion that sums up the entire essay. YOU NEED A THESIS STATEMENT!!!!!!!!!
-know where to cut your essay into paragraphs. this could help you to develop a much better essay since it is in the form. u should know about this..
last but not least, your essay is not concise. what concise means is that, you need slice out what is not needed and keep the sentences that need necessarily.
All three of these pieces forms the portrait, and there is a deep meaning behind them. Andy Warhol helped Pop Art paintings and the screen printing's movement in the 20th century. Warhol’s Blonde reminds me of the characters in Avatar, a movie talks about aliens, because of his skin was blue. I perceived the Avatar movie illustrated the reform of the movie industry since the 20th century. In this one picture, the woman seemed to be made of plastic. The other thing is that, Warhol really liked plastic because he thought plastic people were more beautiful than the real ones. According to the research, he thought people forgot about what emotions were supposed to be during the 1960s. That is the reason why he liked to focus on famous people’ faces and catch their emotions. My first thought on the blonde was that she looked happy to me. Then I focused on her face for 5 seconds. I thought she looked a little bit upset. At the beginning, I thought she looked happy due to the her bright color is the resemblance for sincerity. Thus, the color of the picture could be used to change the emotion of the audiences. The self-portrait was also painted in the early twentieth century. Compared to Warhol’s Blond, the self-portrait looked sad. From her picture, we could see that she really wanted to stop the wars because of her conscience and past experiences. She doesn’t want to speak to others about anything that could expose her hatre toward wars.The picture of Gudea statue was really different from other two pictures. Judea was the ruler of the Sumerian city state of La-gash. This statue includes ruler ship and religion. And it reminds me the Chinese Buddha. The same idea is that they had their own beliefs. The color of the Gudea statues were always dark because the dark color looks serious. Thus, people would respect it.

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All three of these pieces are a portrait and there are deep meaning behind them. Andy Warhol helps Pop Art paintings and screen printings movement in the 20th century. Warhol’s Blonde makes me remembe...

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All three of these pieces are a portrait and there are deep meaning behind them. Andy Warhol helps Pop Art paintings and screen printings movement in the 20th century. Warhol’s Blonde makes me remember the characters in Avatar because of the blue skin. I think Avatar shows the changing from 20th century till now. In this picture, the woman looks plastic, and Warhol really likes plastic because he thinks plastic people are more beautiful than real people. According to the research he said he thinks people forgot what emotions were supposed to be during the 1960s. That is the reason he likes to focus on famous people’s faces and catch the emotion. My first thought on The Blonde is she looks happy. And then I focus on her face for 5 seconds, I think she looks a little bit upset. At the beginning I think she looks happy because the color is bright. Thus, the color of the picture can change the emotion. The Self-portrait is also from 20th century. Compared to Warhol’s Blond, the Self-portrait looks sad. From her picture we can see she really wants to stop wars because of her experience. She just can use his drawing to show her thinking and sadness. She doesn’t want to speak to others that she hates war, but she just hope his drawing can tell and resonate. The picture of Gudea statue is really different from other two pictures. Gudea was the ruler of the Sumerian city state of Lagash. This statue includes ruler ship and religion. And it reminds me the Chinese Buddha. The same idea is they have their own beliefs. The color of the Gudea statues are always dark because the dark color looks serious. Thus, people would respect it.

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