求大神看看这篇初一英语作文有木有语法问题Dear Tom, Oh,you have a nice home,but my home also very beautiful .Let me tell you something about my new home. My home is not very large.But I love it a lot.There is a beautiful garde

求大神看看这篇初一英语作文有木有语法问题Dear Tom, Oh,you have a nice home,but my home also very beautiful .Let me tell you something about my new home. My home is not very large.But I love it a lot.There is a beautiful garde
求大神看看这篇初一英语作文有木有语法问题
Dear Tom,
Oh,you have a nice home,but my home also very beautiful .Let me tell you something about my new home.
My home is not very large.But I love it a lot.There is a beautiful garden behind my house.There are many flowers in the center of the garden.Three trees at the back of the garden.There are three apple trees.Look!Some birds in the tree.
My bedroom next to the study.My study is wonderful.There is a desk,a chair,a shelf,a sofa and so on.What's on the shelf?There are some books and some pens.I like reading books a lot.
The living room is very large.My parents bedroom next to the living room .The kitchen near the dining room.Where is the bathroom?It's next to my study.
I love my home a lot.

求大神看看这篇初一英语作文有木有语法问题Dear Tom, Oh,you have a nice home,but my home also very beautiful .Let me tell you something about my new home. My home is not very large.But I love it a lot.There is a beautiful garde
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Dear Tom,
Oh,you have a nice house,but my house is also very beautiful .Let me tell you something about my new house.
My house is not very large.But I love it a lot.There is a beautiful garden behind my house.There are many flowers in the center of the garden.Three trees are at the back of the garden.There are three apple trees.Look!Some birds are standing on the branch of trees .
My bedroom is next to my study.The study is wonderful.There is a desk,a chair,a shelf,a sofa and so on.And what's on the shelf?There are some books and some pens.I like reading books a lot.
The living room is very large.My parents' bedroom is next to the living room .The kitchen is near the dining room.Where is the bathroom?Well,It's next to my study.
sincerely yours,
Li Ming

Three trees at the back of the garden. 删掉
Some birds on the tree.

时间不够了 只能看这么些 - - 我也是学生 就这样吧some birds in the tree.没错懂得？birds是外来物。前面一个又为什么要删掉？不是 on- -么 in不是长在上面的么 第一句...

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Three trees at the back of the garden. 删掉
Some birds on the tree.

时间不够了 只能看这么些 - - 我也是学生 就这样吧

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1段.but my home is also very beautiful.
4段.My parents' bedroom next to the living room.
建议同种句型或短语使用次数不要太多

有的，‘my home also’改为‘my home is also’，我觉得用home有点怪，你是想写具有感情色彩的家‘home’还是单独描写家house?.
There are many flowers in the center of the garden.Three trees at the back of the garden.There are three apple tre...

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有的，‘my home also’改为‘my home is also’，我觉得用home有点怪，你是想写具有感情色彩的家‘home’还是单独描写家house?.
There are many flowers in the center of the garden.Three trees at the back of the garden.There are three apple trees.Look!Some birds in the tree.你写的有点重复，且最后的语法错误，改为：There are many flowers in the center of the garden and 3 trees are at the back of it.There are also 3 apple trees beside it.Look! some birds are in the tree.(这里还是需要改动，鸟儿到底在哪一棵树上？）
My bedroom next to the study.改为My bedroom is next to the study room.
My parents bedroom next to the living room改为My parents‘ bedroom is next to the living room
The kitchen near the改为The kitchen is near the
因为前面说了.I like reading books a lot.，最后结尾最好写I love my home very much
你的语法大部分是没有be动词，且一些事物叙述不完整，不够简洁，希望你下次做的更好

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第一段：home后加is，最后虽没有语法错误，但是最好把home改成house。第三段and so on去掉，因为他已经把所有都列举了，没必要加上去了，第四段parents改成parents‘复数形式的所有格。整篇文章没有语法错误，但是home与house的区别没有分清，home表示有感情成分的，与“家”的概念相似，但是house只是单纯的指房子，不带任何的情感。...

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第一段：home后加is，最后虽没有语法错误，但是最好把home改成house。第三段and so on去掉，因为他已经把所有都列举了，没必要加上去了，第四段parents改成parents‘复数形式的所有格。整篇文章没有语法错误，但是home与house的区别没有分清，home表示有感情成分的，与“家”的概念相似，但是house只是单纯的指房子，不带任何的情感。

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