作业帮英语自我介绍,帮我提提意见Good afternoon,teachers!My name is***.My English name is ***.I am 13 years old.I like drawing pictures,so my favorite subject is art.And I like math,too.Some people don't like it,but I think it's interesting.My fa
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英语自我介绍,帮我提提意见Good afternoon,teachers!My name is***.My English name is ***.I am 13 years old.I like drawing pictures,so my favorite subject is art.And I like math,too.Some people don't like it,but I think it's interesting.My fa
英语自我介绍,帮我提提意见
Good afternoon,teachers!My name is***.My English name is ***.I am 13 years old.I like drawing pictures,so my favorite subject is art.And I like math,too.Some people don't like it,but I think it's interesting.My favorite animal is dog.because I think they are very lovely.My favorite color is yellow and pink.They're so beautiful.My favorite movie is action movies.It's so exciting,but I don't like documentary,it's very boring.Now let me tell you a story.
帮我改一改,提提意见,我可是第一次参加这种比赛,心里发慌.
帮我看看有没有they're和it's用错的，等等。
英语自我介绍,帮我提提意见Good afternoon,teachers!My name is***.My English name is ***.I am 13 years old.I like drawing pictures,so my favorite subject is art.And I like math,too.Some people don't like it,but I think it's interesting.My fa
没有硬伤,不过不知道你是几年级的,所以如果改得太好了,就不兴同龄人所写的.
很不错。你是初一的吧。有些词是查出来的吧。句型有些单一，试着变换一下.如第一行，说完My name is***.下一句感觉有些重复。试着说成And *** is my English name.再如，我最喜欢的颜色是黄色和粉色。也可以说：I like yellow and pink best.也是这个意思。
My favourite movies are action movies.不是...
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很不错。你是初一的吧。有些词是查出来的吧。句型有些单一，试着变换一下.如第一行，说完My name is***.下一句感觉有些重复。试着说成And *** is my English name.再如，我最喜欢的颜色是黄色和粉色。也可以说：I like yellow and pink best.也是这个意思。
My favourite movies are action movies.不是is.还有，是They are so exciting.不是It's.
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句型单调，全是my ........，我也是初一的，我们老师说了，句型要复杂，不能太单一，然后单词难度也要增加，还有就是主次不分，有的应该一带而过，有的就要详细介绍，对了，最后的那句话，告诉我们什么故事呀？？，加油改吧。