帮忙改改英语自我介绍,马上就比赛了!Hi,everybody,my name is ***.I’m 14 years old.I’m an active girl in my school.I have many hobbies,such as singing,swimming,but my favourite is English.English bring the wonderful fun to my life.Per

帮忙改改英语自我介绍,马上就比赛了!Hi,everybody,my name is ***.I’m 14 years old.I’m an active girl in my school.I have many hobbies,such as singing,swimming,but my favourite is English.English bring the wonderful fun to my life.Per
帮忙改改英语自我介绍,马上就比赛了!
Hi,everybody,my name is ***.I’m 14 years old.I’m an active girl in my school.I have many hobbies,such as singing,swimming,but my favourite is English.English bring the wonderful fun to my life.Perhaps someone thinks it’s difficult to study well,but I like it.I dream of being an translator when I grow up.It isn’t a day dream.I know it’s difficult to succeed and I have to double to effort.But I want to try.I will do my best.I believe that if you try your best,everything can be done well.
帮着改改啊，100个词左右，

帮忙改改英语自我介绍,马上就比赛了!Hi,everybody,my name is ***.I’m 14 years old.I’m an active girl in my school.I have many hobbies,such as singing,swimming,but my favourite is English.English bring the wonderful fun to my life.Per
Hi, everybody, my name is ***. I’m 14 years old. I’m an active girl in my school. I have many hobbies, such as singing, swimming, but my favourite is English.(这里可以换一下句型,如果是比赛用的,连着N个短句都是以I开头的,听起来有点,IIII）
改：Hi, everybody, my name is ***. I’m 14 years old. In my school, I am an active girl who has many hobbies, such as singing, swimming and so on. English is my favourite. It brings a lot wonderful fun to my life. Some people may consider that English is difficult to learn, but I don't agree. I like English, and I am willing to become a professional translator in the future. I believe it isn't a day-dream. Maybe my dream is not easy to achieve, but I would like to pay double effort to realize my dream. I want to have a try and I will do my best! I believe that if you try your best, every thing can be done well and every dream will be realized!
（改了一些词,加了一些句子,比较口语化,适用于开场,希望你能采纳.）

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第二行 but my favourite one is English, 一定要加one，否则就是大错误。
还有，i dream of being an translator 不是an 是a，补充一点，translator和interpreter是有区别的，前者是翻译者就是笔译，后者是口译者，你表达的是你想说的吗？
其他的大家都说了。
现在初中英文水平好高啊，最后祝你《口若...

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第二行 but my favourite one is English, 一定要加one，否则就是大错误。
还有，i dream of being an translator 不是an 是a，补充一点，translator和interpreter是有区别的，前者是翻译者就是笔译，后者是口译者，你表达的是你想说的吗？
其他的大家都说了。
现在初中英文水平好高啊，最后祝你《口若悬河，“译”统天下》

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Hi, everybody, my name is ***. I’m 14 years old. I’m an active girl in my school. I have many hobbies, such as singing, swimming, but my favourite is English. English brings the wonderful fun to my li...

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Hi, everybody, my name is ***. I’m 14 years old. I’m an active girl in my school. I have many hobbies, such as singing, swimming, but my favourite is English. English brings the wonderful fun to my life. Perhaps someone thinks it’s difficult to study well, but I like it. I dream of being an translator when I grow up. It isn’t a day dream. I know it’s difficult to succeed and I have to double to effort. But I want to try. I will do my best. I believe that if you try your best, everything can be done most.

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